Carol is dead
By
Damian Francis
This
is an attempt to write a short story. I hope you enjoy it.
Carol’s body was lying on the floor,
her indescribable beauty made the scene unbelievable. She was a beautiful white
flower that caught people’s eye. The police had knocked at the door several
times and nobody opened it, there, by her side, Martin Smith was sitting like a
bronze statute; he could not listen or talk, he was in shock. The first
expressions that one of the police said were “he killed her, he killed her…”-
“put your hands up”- said the other one. Carol had disappeared some days ago, her family was extremely worried about that situation.
She had gotten engaged a couple of
weeks ago, that is the reason why Martin behaved as a cornered animal, he was
not able to think clearly , his split mind made him feel he was between two
fire. He repeated himself “if she is not mine, she won’t be with anyone else”.
He was wide awake for two days, just thinking about, Carol, the woman he loved.
This love was bigger than the universe; nothing made sense if she was not by his
side.
Since she got engaged with a man
imposed by her father, they had not been able to see each other, and it was
killing Martin. One gray afternoon, he made the decision to knock at Carol’s
windows room and propose her to run away together, but she said they would talk
about it the day after because they could not be seen together in her room.
The day after, Carol left the house
with dawn to talk about the decision they had to make. On her way, she felt the
cold wind slapping her face as if it were complaining with her for the decision
she was about to make. The wet streets recorded her steps, one by one.
When Carol arrived at Martin’s room, the
door was opened, he had been waiting for her all day long. The room was dark,
and there was a sharp ammonia odor that made Carol shakes. They started the
conversation without looking each other in the eye. She said that she loved
him, but they could not be together, it was an impossible love.
Martin approached her and with both
hands around her neck, he tightened it so strong that he strangled the poor
Carol. When she was breathless, he put her on his lap on the floor. He repeated
“I love you, I love you, I love…”and then, he stood still.
Wow!
ResponderEliminarIt is so sad story, actually in this time there are people with problem to accept the decision of the other person it is Regrettably to see many people to die by unscrupulous people
Hi Yanet. This story is inspired in femicides. In our culture men react that way.
EliminarHi Yanet. This story is inspired in femicides. In our culture men react that way.
EliminarThere loves that end in disagrace and this was one of those stories. This man obssessed. He clung to his wonan. Not to say, lwave it in the histori of shock as they are not the kind of atory i like to read.
ResponderEliminarHello Evelyn, that is life. There is not always a happy ending.
EliminarIt is difficult to find situations related to this, but so not everyone is able to recognize who lost something that was not hers and while the other person is still watching obsession this individual continues to rely on him or her, many marriages are arranged by our parents before birth, which is painful for those who were not taken into account when making this decision.
ResponderEliminarHello Cristiana. You are right, individuals should be allowed to make their own decisions.
EliminarHello Cristiana. You are right, individuals should be allowed to make their own decisions.
Eliminarit is very sad that this story ended in a tragedy. even thought they were in love l think he should have respect her decition and live their life separate. no man have the right to kill a woman.dagoberto garcia
ResponderEliminarHello Dagoberto. You are right, no one has the right to kill on be half love.
EliminarHello Dagoberto. You are right, no one has the right to kill on be half love.
EliminarThat`s interesting tale. It a very said Store and I saw this case more than once on tv programs in My Coventry unfourtunately.
ResponderEliminarHi Rosa. That's life. There are Not always happy ending.
Eliminarthe obsession of a person can go so far until he kills someone else, people must know drop, it hurts, but time takes care to overcome
ResponderEliminarHi Danielle, you are right, but people have different reactions.
EliminarHi Danielle, you are right, but people have different reactions.
EliminarMy country there some case equal Carol`s story.
ResponderEliminarNowadays it is a common history. Many people suffer that. In that country is too common.
ResponderEliminarHi Margarita, femicides are common in our country, they have become a culture.
EliminarHi.
ResponderEliminarI Like this history, but i didn't know you write novels!!
This narrative is not far from the current reality, by the issue of femicide in the Dom. Rep.
I only remains to way that the expression it's true:there are loves that kill.
Goood job Damián!!!
Thanks Israel, I am happy you liked it.
EliminarThanks Israel, I am happy you liked it.
EliminarIt's a sad history, but in the actually it's normal. The men do not respect women and do whatever they want with them. The women must be given to respect... Teresa Berenice Abud.
ResponderEliminarIt is so sad Teresa. I think we have a lot to change.
EliminarIt is so sad Teresa. I think we have a lot to change.
EliminarIt is unfortunate but true this story is we live daily in our country. It's amazing how far a person can go for love.
ResponderEliminarHello Anabel, I am happy you enjoyed this story.
EliminarHello Anabel, I am happy you enjoyed this story.
EliminarIt is unfortunate but true this story is we live daily in our country. It's amazing how far a person can go for love.
ResponderEliminarIn the last years the death of woman hand of men it worrying, the society should put stop to this.
ResponderEliminarYes, you are right. We, as society, have to overcome this situation.
EliminarYes, you are right. We, as society, have to overcome this situation.
EliminarIn the article talked of Carol's dead telling the history of two person who leved each other,but couldn't be together because the father of Carol not wanted and Carol did the that father said.
ResponderEliminarThe boy Mathin didn't understand the decisión of Carol and he killed her, he said if she is not of he she won't be with enyone else.
Nowadays this topic is common the that man don't understand that the woman heve rigth a be with other men and the kill her.
Yes, you are right. The femicides have become a culture problem in our country.
EliminarWao , that story! I think if you love , you should not love with a sickly love, but with a healthy love and seeking the good and happiness of the other.
ResponderEliminarBest regards,
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Hello Gina. Sometimes what drive men crazy is the women's decision.
ResponderEliminarHello Gina. Sometimes what drive men crazy is the women's decision.
ResponderEliminarCarlos Brea
ResponderEliminarWao is an incredible love story. I think you are a very good writter, for mi is a honor to be teaching for you, because you have to much talent. This story is very sad, but is posible in the real live, too much men have an not healthy love, is dangerous for woman to keep love with some extrange man, in our country is common crazy men, they destroy women, is a terrible reality nowdays.
The story is very sad, talks about domestic violence, I think it is a mistake to take decisions for another person as did the father of Carol violating their right. The description of Carol is a beautiful and passionate woman, she loved a Martin, however he had not compassion for her and ended up killing her.
ResponderEliminarThe story is common in our country with the exception that the father doesn`t take the decision for the girl, i feel bad when I read the news that another woman loses her life to her husband's hand